Ⅰ 高考英语作文，请点评下书写效果
书写非常漂亮，高考看你书写，映像分要高几分
Ⅱ 关于提高高中学生英语写作能力的几点看法
1. 把字给我写好！！！
就是所谓的“第一印象”，至关重要，这决定了你的作文档。阅卷老师阅卷时首先给你的作文定档，如满分25分，一档20-25，二档15-20，以此类推。想拿高分必须保证自己的作文在一档。
试想你的字老师都看不懂，给你三档就不错了。这个楼上有图有真相，我就不赘述了，字写得不好看也没关系，一笔一画写清楚。切记别写花体，反正我是看不懂的，老师愿不愿意看我就不知道了。
2. 结构清晰
简而言之就是段落清楚，我的建议是三段式，第一段写现象，第二段写方法，第三段写总结。大概就是这样一个模式，随便翻一个高考例文就差不多这样。
全文必须有清晰的连词和介词，比如however，moreover，more importantly；to begin with，further-more 。总结用to conclude，generally speaking等等。
3. 拿高分最重要的就是要有亮点词句
这个问题我之前回答过，高考英语作文该怎样做好积累呢？ 也是我的经验之谈，全靠这个拿高分。
有人私信我要我再补充几个亮点句式和词组，在这里满足一下。
it is vital for us to do ……
……is nothing but wasting time
prevail among
broaden sb‘s horizon
……is groundless
It’s obvious that ……is playing an increasingly essential role in ……
there are two/three reasons behind this phenomenon
就说这么多，只要自己用心积累，考试的时候必然不愁词用。不过请务必弄清这些句式或词组的准确用法。
4. 几个重要的注意事项
请不要使用同一个词超过3遍！学会变词，比如要重复表示"下降"，请不要写三四个“drop”，学会用decrease，descend，go down，fall，decline。
绝对不能出现拼写错误，时态错误，单复数错误。想从一档变成二档，请出错。请不要忘记三单动词加s。请保持文章所用时态合理的一致。
不断的变换句式。被动句，强调句等变换着使用，尝试用虚拟语气等多种时态。前提是合理，不要把自己搞糊涂了。
请平时做好积累，考试时直接套用。
希望能帮助到你，望采纳！
Ⅲ 高中英语作文点评
第二行that这样引导定从不对，换成about
第四行sell及物动词，后面要加宾语，前后分局不是因果关系，用so链接不合适，选用however比较好
第八行collect当收集讲，这里要是想表示保留最好使用keep
第九行give away表示赠送的时候需要接to
第十一行sell them to store to exchange
总的来说还是一片比较通顺的文章，从高考角度讲大约在二档中偏下的位置，使用的词组较恰当，但是巨型过于单一并且还有错误，建议引入同位语从句和强调句，单词过于简单，如果你的作文打算求稳这样既基本可以，如果要夺高分，就要使用一些高阶词汇和高级句子，比如提建议可引入虚拟语气，连接词还应更恰当，使文章更紧密。
Ⅳ 求高考英语作文点评！
只是我的一点小意见~
小作文：12分。 大作文：22分。
两篇作文都存在有少量语法错误和一些动词的混淆（比如in、at、on没用对），其余的都不错哟~ 加油加油~~
Ⅳ 高考英语作文怎样讲评
引导学生仔细研究评分标准之后把5个档次的学生习作展示给大家，并再次说明打这样的分数的理由何在。这样做的目的是让学生学会如何给作文打分，同时他无形之中也了解了高分作文必备的条件。第二，个别学生当着全班同学的面对教师抽取各档次的作文进行试评并说明理由。在学生试评之后及时进行评价，指出学生给的分数是否合理并说明理由。这一步是第一点的加深和巩固。第三，采用学生互改的方式。学生写作初始阶段往往看不见自己作文中存在的问题和错误，而看别人的作文时，就会旁观者清。经常帮助别人挑错的同时也提醒自己不要犯同样的错误。第四，分批次找个别学生面批。教师可以把班上的学生根据写作水平分成上、中、下三组，然后在每组学生中抽取一定的比例进行面批。基础薄弱的后进生要求达到以下目标：
1、符合主题，要点完整；
2、篇章结构合理；
3、能正确运用5个简单句基本句式，表述清楚。
中等生要求达到以下目标：
1、符合主题，要点完整；
2、篇章结构合理，能适当运用连接语；
3、能正确运用已学高中词汇，语法正确，尝试运用已学复杂句式。
优等生要求达到以下目标：
1、符合主题，要点完整；
2、篇章结构合理，过渡自然
3、能熟练运用高中已学词汇和复杂句式，表述自然、地道对一些。这样各类学生都能根据目前高考作文评分标准，扬长避短，尽可能多的得到自己力所能及的分。并经常鼓励后进生和中等生通过一步一步努力，最终到达优等生的水准。而对优等生则要求更加严格以保证他们的水平稳中有近。
Ⅵ 看看高考英语作文 评分，并点评一下
Brother and sister 可以改 siblings (兄弟姐妹）.
In my eyes 则能改成 from my perspective. (大概就是 ‘从我的角度来说。’）
I will have more love 是绝对语病！写英文不能用华语直直翻译哦！
We can help each other don't always let parents to give we help 则改成 we can help each other and don't always depend (依赖）our parents to help us.
Must have 可以改成will have.
must have more happy ,love and some interesting thing改成 will be more fun (更多乐趣） ，(love 可以省略哦！）and more interesting.
that is so beauty(这是正确的形容词么？） and so cool写作This will be awsome! （这将会非常的棒！）就行了。
if my family is only three people是错误的if there are only three people in my family (这才是正确的构造！）
that could loss some pleasure to me（又犯了直接从中文翻译成英文的错误喽！）I will feel bored. (我会觉得闷。）会不会比较恰当呢？
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because there is not a age like me people（又直接翻译了哦！！）because there is no one who are same age with me. (没有与我年龄相仿的人）
,a age like me people can have more common language compete parents.so i hope i have a sister or brother.（错误错误啦！QAQ！）If there are someone who are same age with me to communicate with. (可以交流）最后一句呢P4和哦sister改成siblings就行了。
啊啊~我们老师是犯五个错误就不及格的！所以我也不知到怎么评呢...不过如果你肯加油一定会进步的！
Ⅶ 怎样点评高考英语作文
1. 关于……人们有不同的观点。一些人认为……
There are different opinions among people as to ____ .Some people suggest that ____.
2. 俗话说（常言道）……，它是我们前辈的经历，但是，即使在今天，它在许多场合仍然适用。
There is an old saying______. It"s the experience of our forefathers，however，it is correct in many cases even today.
3. 现在，……，它们给我们的日常生活带来了许多危害。首先，……；其次，……。更为糟糕的是……。
Today, ____, which have brought a lot of harms in our daily life. First, ____ Second,____. What makes things worse is that______.
4. 现在，……很普遍，许多人喜欢……，因为……，另外（而且）……。
Nowadays，it is common to ______. Many people like ______ because ______. Besides，______.
5. 任何事物都是有两面性，……也不例外。它既有有利的一面，也有不利的一面。
Everything has two sides and ______ is not an exception，it has both advantages and disadvantages.
6. 关于……人们的观点各不相同，一些人认为（说）……，在他们看来，……
People's opinions about ______ vary from person to person. Some people say that ______.To them,_____.
7. 人类正面临着一个严重的问题……，这个问题变得越来越严重。
Man is now facing a big problem ______ which is becoming more and more serious.
8. ……已成为人的关注的热门话题，特别是在年青人当中，将引发激烈的辩论。
______ has become a hot topic among people，especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.
9. ……在我们的日常生活中起着越来越重要的作用，它给我们带来了许多好处，但同时也引发一些严重的问题。
______ has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life.it has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well.
10. 根据图表/数字/统计数字/表格中的百分比/图表/条形图/成形图可以看出……。很显然……，但是为什么呢？
According to the figure/number/statistics/percentages in the /chart/bar graph/line/graph，it can be seen that______ while. Obviously，______，but why?
Ⅷ 一篇高考英语作文 请点评 找出错误 并提出改进方案 并打分（以高考30分评定）
which make students worried and annoyed .时态错误，用一般现在时就可以，为什么会用到过去时？如果你告诉我这是make的用法，那请你再去重新看下你们老师是怎么讲make的用法的。
thy almost tried all kinds of ways 这里最好不用way用methods
For fear of thier child get into trouble 孩子用复数，否则的话get用第三人称单数。同时，For fear of只能加名词，如果想加句子要用that引导名词性从句来指代，不能直接加句子。
For fear of thier child get into trouble in daily life with no one turn to help,so they are eager to read our diaries so as to give us some sugestions.
把so去掉，否则句子没有主语。
with no one turn to help能告诉我这是什么结构么？with no help 就可以。
简单看了一下，问题还挺多的，分以下几点评定吧。
一，文章内容：内容缺失 ，没有完全忠于题目。
请仔细阅读题目。“演讲稿的主要内容应包括：认为同学们不必为此苦恼，”你的文章里根本没有提及到这一点，“认为同学们不必为此苦恼”，当然后一点是主体，要仔细写，但是题目要求的内容必须必须要写。哪怕一两句也好，简单的说一下。首先写出题目搜提到的现象，然后加上这样一句“However,in my point of view we needn't to worry about this”。
二，语法错误：时态、从句以及一些词的用法。
这是一篇演讲文章，里面的内容都是一些观点性的看法，以及对于事实现象的阐述，只用一般现在时就可以。那么什么时候需要用到过去时和将来时呢？将来时很好说的，就是比如说你最后希望将来大家都会如何如何。过去时可以用在例子当中，不过必须是个具体的例子，比如说，我的好朋友某某某，他家里发生过类似的情况，但是因为他和他家长有很好的沟通，所以他和家长都可以信任并且理解对方。这就可以用过去时，同时举例子也会增加文章的可信度。
很多地方你使用了从句来增，但是使用的并不是很好。建议自己再仔细看看语法书，然后多练习造从句，随心所欲的使用只会给你的文章增加错误。
还有就是一些词的用法，with的用法还有For fear of的用法。一定要用自己熟悉的、确定了解的词的用法，如果自己不确定千万别自造。这样会让阅卷老师一眼看出你的问题来。
最后一段还不错，用了强调句，而且没有错误。
修改：
GOOD morning ,ladies and gentlemen.
【Some of us are having problems with our parents ,as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries.】Parents always do such things ,which worry the students a lot.However,in my point of view we needn't to worry about this.Actually,all of us should try to understand our parents' behavior. In order to know more about us ,they almost tried all kinds of methods .They just want to give us a hand when we study with great difficulties.For fear of thier child gets into trouble in daily life with no help, they are eager to read our diaries so as to give us some sugestions.
All in all,we should communicate with our parents as often as we can .Only in this way can we let our parents trust us.I do hope both parents and children can get on well with each other.
Ⅸ 求高中英语作文佳作及详细点评
Olympic Games English Composition
The Olympic Games (often referred to simply as The Olympics or The Games) is an international multi-sport event subdivided into summer and winter sporting events. The summer and winter games are each held every four years. Until 1992, they were held in the same year. Since then, they have been celebrated two years apart.
The original Olympic Games began in 776 BCE in Olympia, Greece, and were celebrated until CE 393. In 1896, the ancient Olympic Games were revived at the initiative of a French nobleman, Pierre Frédy, Baron de Coubertin, thus beginning the era of the Modern Olympic Games.Since the first modern games, in Athens, Greece, participation in the Olympic Games has increased to include athletes from nearly all nations worldwide.
With the improvement of satellite communications and global telecasts of the events, the Olympics are consistently gaining supporters.The most recent Summer Olympics were the 2004 Games in Athens and the most recent Winter Olympics were the 2006 Games in Turin. The upcoming games in Beijing are planned to comprise 302 events in 28 sports. As of 2006, the Winter Olympics were competed in 84 events in 7 sports.
The Advantages and Disadvantages of Internet
The following aspects could best illustrate the advantages of Internet. Netsurfers in different countries can share interesting knowledge and the latest information. Besides, Internet has provided a major opportunity to buy and sell merchandise . What is more, people may get medical help or even vote on Internet. Its advantages seem countless.
Behind all this glowing talk, however, are some problems. Internet makes people passive by stopping them making their own entertainment. So much so that when there is a breakdown or jam, people may find that World Wide Web turns into World Wide Wait. What is worse, some children have access to the scenes of violence and sex. Apart from these, it can be affected by viruses and hackers.
We should handle its problems, meanwhile we should exploit its potential as well. With proper management of Internet people ought to experience more fruits of the information revolution. All the wisdom of the ages, all the information that has enlightened mankind for centuries, should be available to us with the healthy development of Internet.
The Strength of Belief
On January 29th, the first day of the Chinese year, grandma took me to the Yade Buddha Temple to pray for being able to have a lucky year.
The whole city was dipped in warm light, when we arrived. God! I hardly made out this temple because the whole block was filled with people. We could move our feet just a little at a time. Now you may have the idea how many people there were. But it was amazing that the crowd was so quiet. Worshippers, one by one, seriously knelt down before the statue of the Buddha.
I thought that I hadn’t done anything as earnestly as them when I saw those worshippers praying so devoutly. Everyone kept quiet, closed his eyes. I seemed like that there was only him in this world. I was shocked. From them, I felt the strength of belief. I learnt that not only the belief of the Buddhism, but also the beliefs of all the beautiful things can enable us to be successful. Once we get our belief, the eternal spirit shall help us overcome all the difficulties we might meet with.
I raised my head and saw the Buddha smiling to me so mystically