Ⅰ 高考英語作文，請點評下書寫效果
書寫非常漂亮，高考看你書寫，映像分要高幾分
Ⅱ 關於提高高中學生英語寫作能力的幾點看法
1. 把字給我寫好！！！
就是所謂的「第一印象」，至關重要，這決定了你的作文檔。閱卷老師閱卷時首先給你的作文定檔，如滿分25分，一檔20-25，二檔15-20，以此類推。想拿高分必須保證自己的作文在一檔。
試想你的字老師都看不懂，給你三檔就不錯了。這個樓上有圖有真相，我就不贅述了，字寫得不好看也沒關系，一筆一畫寫清楚。切記別寫花體，反正我是看不懂的，老師願不願意看我就不知道了。
2. 結構清晰
簡而言之就是段落清楚，我的建議是三段式，第一段寫現象，第二段寫方法，第三段寫總結。大概就是這樣一個模式，隨便翻一個高考例文就差不多這樣。
全文必須有清晰的連詞和介詞，比如however，moreover，more importantly；to begin with，further-more 。總結用to conclude，generally speaking等等。
3. 拿高分最重要的就是要有亮點詞句
這個問題我之前回答過，高考英語作文該怎樣做好積累呢？ 也是我的經驗之談，全靠這個拿高分。
有人私信我要我再補充幾個亮點句式和片語，在這里滿足一下。
it is vital for us to do ……
……is nothing but wasting time
prevail among
broaden sb『s horizon
……is groundless
It』s obvious that ……is playing an increasingly essential role in ……
there are two/three reasons behind this phenomenon
就說這么多，只要自己用心積累，考試的時候必然不愁詞用。不過請務必弄清這些句式或片語的准確用法。
4. 幾個重要的注意事項
請不要使用同一個詞超過3遍！學會變詞，比如要重復表示"下降"，請不要寫三四個「drop」，學會用decrease，descend，go down，fall，decline。
絕對不能出現拼寫錯誤，時態錯誤，單復數錯誤。想從一檔變成二檔，請出錯。請不要忘記三單動詞加s。請保持文章所用時態合理的一致。
不斷的變換句式。被動句，強調句等變換著使用，嘗試用虛擬語氣等多種時態。前提是合理，不要把自己搞糊塗了。
請平時做好積累，考試時直接套用。
希望能幫助到你，望採納！
Ⅲ 高中英語作文點評
第二行that這樣引導定從不對，換成about
第四行sell及物動詞，後面要加賓語，前後分局不是因果關系，用so鏈接不合適，選用however比較好
第八行collect當收集講，這里要是想表示保留最好使用keep
第九行give away表示贈送的時候需要接to
第十一行sell them to store to exchange
總的來說還是一片比較通順的文章，從高考角度講大約在二檔中偏下的位置，使用的片語較恰當，但是巨型過於單一並且還有錯誤，建議引入同位語從句和強調句，單詞過於簡單，如果你的作文打算求穩這樣既基本可以，如果要奪高分，就要使用一些高階詞彙和高級句子，比如提建議可引入虛擬語氣，連接詞還應更恰當，使文章更緊密。
Ⅳ 求高考英語作文點評！
只是我的一點小意見~
小作文：12分。 大作文：22分。
兩篇作文都存在有少量語法錯誤和一些動詞的混淆（比如in、at、on沒用對），其餘的都不錯喲~ 加油加油~~
Ⅳ 高考英語作文怎樣講評
引導學生仔細研究評分標准之後把5個檔次的學生習作展示給大家，並再次說明打這樣的分數的理由何在。這樣做的目的是讓學生學會如何給作文打分，同時他無形之中也了解了高分作文必備的條件。第二，個別學生當著全班同學的面對教師抽取各檔次的作文進行試評並說明理由。在學生試評之後及時進行評價，指出學生給的分數是否合理並說明理由。這一步是第一點的加深和鞏固。第三，採用學生互改的方式。學生寫作初始階段往往看不見自己作文中存在的問題和錯誤，而看別人的作文時，就會旁觀者清。經常幫助別人挑錯的同時也提醒自己不要犯同樣的錯誤。第四，分批次找個別學生面批。教師可以把班上的學生根據寫作水平分成上、中、下三組，然後在每組學生中抽取一定的比例進行面批。基礎薄弱的後進生要求達到以下目標：
1、符合主題，要點完整；
2、篇章結構合理；
3、能正確運用5個簡單句基本句式，表述清楚。
中等生要求達到以下目標：
1、符合主題，要點完整；
2、篇章結構合理，能適當運用連接語；
3、能正確運用已學高中詞彙，語法正確，嘗試運用已學復雜句式。
優等生要求達到以下目標：
1、符合主題，要點完整；
2、篇章結構合理，過渡自然
3、能熟練運用高中已學詞彙和復雜句式，表述自然、地道對一些。這樣各類學生都能根據目前高考作文評分標准，揚長避短，盡可能多的得到自己力所能及的分。並經常鼓勵後進生和中等生通過一步一步努力，最終到達優等生的水準。而對優等生則要求更加嚴格以保證他們的水平穩中有近。
Ⅵ 看看高考英語作文 評分，並點評一下
Brother and sister 可以改 siblings (兄弟姐妹）.
In my eyes 則能改成 from my perspective. (大概就是 『從我的角度來說。』）
I will have more love 是絕對語病！寫英文不能用華語直直翻譯哦！
We can help each other don't always let parents to give we help 則改成 we can help each other and don't always depend (依賴）our parents to help us.
Must have 可以改成will have.
must have more happy ,love and some interesting thing改成 will be more fun (更多樂趣） ，(love 可以省略哦！）and more interesting.
that is so beauty(這是正確的形容詞么？） and so cool寫作This will be awsome! （這將會非常的棒！）就行了。
if my family is only three people是錯誤的if there are only three people in my family (這才是正確的構造！）
that could loss some pleasure to me（又犯了直接從中文翻譯成英文的錯誤嘍！）I will feel bored. (我會覺得悶。）會不會比較恰當呢？
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because there is not a age like me people（又直接翻譯了哦！！）because there is no one who are same age with me. (沒有與我年齡相仿的人）
,a age like me people can have more common language compete parents.so i hope i have a sister or brother.（錯誤錯誤啦！QAQ！）If there are someone who are same age with me to communicate with. (可以交流）最後一句呢P4和哦sister改成siblings就行了。
啊啊~我們老師是犯五個錯誤就不及格的！所以我也不知到怎麼評呢...不過如果你肯加油一定會進步的！
Ⅶ 怎樣點評高考英語作文
1. 關於……人們有不同的觀點。一些人認為……
There are different opinions among people as to ____ .Some people suggest that ____.
2. 俗話說（常言道）……，它是我們前輩的經歷，但是，即使在今天，它在許多場合仍然適用。
There is an old saying______. It"s the experience of our forefathers，however，it is correct in many cases even today.
3. 現在，……，它們給我們的日常生活帶來了許多危害。首先，……；其次，……。更為糟糕的是……。
Today, ____, which have brought a lot of harms in our daily life. First, ____ Second,____. What makes things worse is that______.
4. 現在，……很普遍，許多人喜歡……，因為……，另外（而且）……。
Nowadays，it is common to ______. Many people like ______ because ______. Besides，______.
5. 任何事物都是有兩面性，……也不例外。它既有有利的一面，也有不利的一面。
Everything has two sides and ______ is not an exception，it has both advantages and disadvantages.
6. 關於……人們的觀點各不相同，一些人認為（說）……，在他們看來，……
People's opinions about ______ vary from person to person. Some people say that ______.To them,_____.
7. 人類正面臨著一個嚴重的問題……，這個問題變得越來越嚴重。
Man is now facing a big problem ______ which is becoming more and more serious.
8. ……已成為人的關注的熱門話題，特別是在年青人當中，將引發激烈的辯論。
______ has become a hot topic among people，especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.
9. ……在我們的日常生活中起著越來越重要的作用，它給我們帶來了許多好處，但同時也引發一些嚴重的問題。
______ has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life.it has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well.
10. 根據圖表/數字/統計數字/表格中的百分比/圖表/條形圖/成形圖可以看出……。很顯然……，但是為什麼呢？
According to the figure/number/statistics/percentages in the /chart/bar graph/line/graph，it can be seen that______ while. Obviously，______，but why?
Ⅷ 一篇高考英語作文 請點評 找出錯誤 並提出改進方案 並打分（以高考30分評定）
which make students worried and annoyed .時態錯誤，用一般現在時就可以，為什麼會用到過去時？如果你告訴我這是make的用法，那請你再去重新看下你們老師是怎麼講make的用法的。
thy almost tried all kinds of ways 這里最好不用way用methods
For fear of thier child get into trouble 孩子用復數，否則的話get用第三人稱單數。同時，For fear of只能加名詞，如果想加句子要用that引導名詞性從句來指代，不能直接加句子。
For fear of thier child get into trouble in daily life with no one turn to help,so they are eager to read our diaries so as to give us some sugestions.
把so去掉，否則句子沒有主語。
with no one turn to help能告訴我這是什麼結構么？with no help 就可以。
簡單看了一下，問題還挺多的，分以下幾點評定吧。
一，文章內容：內容缺失 ，沒有完全忠於題目。
請仔細閱讀題目。「演講稿的主要內容應包括：認為同學們不必為此苦惱，」你的文章里根本沒有提及到這一點，「認為同學們不必為此苦惱」，當然後一點是主體，要仔細寫，但是題目要求的內容必須必須要寫。哪怕一兩句也好，簡單的說一下。首先寫出題目搜提到的現象，然後加上這樣一句「However,in my point of view we needn't to worry about this」。
二，語法錯誤：時態、從句以及一些詞的用法。
這是一篇演講文章，裡面的內容都是一些觀點性的看法，以及對於事實現象的闡述，只用一般現在時就可以。那麼什麼時候需要用到過去時和將來時呢？將來時很好說的，就是比如說你最後希望將來大家都會如何如何。過去時可以用在例子當中，不過必須是個具體的例子，比如說，我的好朋友某某某，他家裡發生過類似的情況，但是因為他和他家長有很好的溝通，所以他和家長都可以信任並且理解對方。這就可以用過去時，同時舉例子也會增加文章的可信度。
很多地方你使用了從句來增，但是使用的並不是很好。建議自己再仔細看看語法書，然後多練習造從句，隨心所欲的使用只會給你的文章增加錯誤。
還有就是一些詞的用法，with的用法還有For fear of的用法。一定要用自己熟悉的、確定了解的詞的用法，如果自己不確定千萬別自造。這樣會讓閱卷老師一眼看出你的問題來。
最後一段還不錯，用了強調句，而且沒有錯誤。
修改：
GOOD morning ,ladies and gentlemen.
【Some of us are having problems with our parents ,as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries.】Parents always do such things ,which worry the students a lot.However,in my point of view we needn't to worry about this.Actually,all of us should try to understand our parents' behavior. In order to know more about us ,they almost tried all kinds of methods .They just want to give us a hand when we study with great difficulties.For fear of thier child gets into trouble in daily life with no help, they are eager to read our diaries so as to give us some sugestions.
All in all,we should communicate with our parents as often as we can .Only in this way can we let our parents trust us.I do hope both parents and children can get on well with each other.
Ⅸ 求高中英語作文佳作及詳細點評
Olympic Games English Composition
The Olympic Games (often referred to simply as The Olympics or The Games) is an international multi-sport event subdivided into summer and winter sporting events. The summer and winter games are each held every four years. Until 1992, they were held in the same year. Since then, they have been celebrated two years apart.
The original Olympic Games began in 776 BCE in Olympia, Greece, and were celebrated until CE 393. In 1896, the ancient Olympic Games were revived at the initiative of a French nobleman, Pierre Frédy, Baron de Coubertin, thus beginning the era of the Modern Olympic Games.Since the first modern games, in Athens, Greece, participation in the Olympic Games has increased to include athletes from nearly all nations worldwide.
With the improvement of satellite communications and global telecasts of the events, the Olympics are consistently gaining supporters.The most recent Summer Olympics were the 2004 Games in Athens and the most recent Winter Olympics were the 2006 Games in Turin. The upcoming games in Beijing are planned to comprise 302 events in 28 sports. As of 2006, the Winter Olympics were competed in 84 events in 7 sports.
The Advantages and Disadvantages of Internet
The following aspects could best illustrate the advantages of Internet. Netsurfers in different countries can share interesting knowledge and the latest information. Besides, Internet has provided a major opportunity to buy and sell merchandise . What is more, people may get medical help or even vote on Internet. Its advantages seem countless.
Behind all this glowing talk, however, are some problems. Internet makes people passive by stopping them making their own entertainment. So much so that when there is a breakdown or jam, people may find that World Wide Web turns into World Wide Wait. What is worse, some children have access to the scenes of violence and sex. Apart from these, it can be affected by viruses and hackers.
We should handle its problems, meanwhile we should exploit its potential as well. With proper management of Internet people ought to experience more fruits of the information revolution. All the wisdom of the ages, all the information that has enlightened mankind for centuries, should be available to us with the healthy development of Internet.
The Strength of Belief
On January 29th, the first day of the Chinese year, grandma took me to the Yade Buddha Temple to pray for being able to have a lucky year.
The whole city was dipped in warm light, when we arrived. God! I hardly made out this temple because the whole block was filled with people. We could move our feet just a little at a time. Now you may have the idea how many people there were. But it was amazing that the crowd was so quiet. Worshippers, one by one, seriously knelt down before the statue of the Buddha.
I thought that I hadn』t done anything as earnestly as them when I saw those worshippers praying so devoutly. Everyone kept quiet, closed his eyes. I seemed like that there was only him in this world. I was shocked. From them, I felt the strength of belief. I learnt that not only the belief of the Buddhism, but also the beliefs of all the beautiful things can enable us to be successful. Once we get our belief, the eternal spirit shall help us overcome all the difficulties we might meet with.
I raised my head and saw the Buddha smiling to me so mystically