『壹』 這是一篇需要更改語法的英語作文=L= 英語大大快來幫我一把
嗯fake commodities 是兩個詞……是排版問題嗎?
*第一節可以直接變成一句話:...China today, that...
*the beginning of 可作 the emergence of, beginning我也說不出哪兒不對,但是意思稍微欠那麼一點兒……
pharmaceutical (拼錯了
這句話的介詞似乎有問題……理論上應該是There are lots of fake commodities in XXX instry。那你想表達「從這個行業到那個行業」,這是一個同位語。所以應該是There are lots of fake commodities in various/almost all instries, from pharmaceuticals to food(嗯這里好像instry也不用做重復,可以這樣直接說東西)
buy這個動詞強調動作,這句話也就變成了「很多人害怕他們會去買假貨」。可以變成「have bought(買到了假貨)」或者「will get(會買到假貨)」
「In order to..."一句,我的理解是」為了放心,所以人們傾向於高價購買商品「?如果是這樣的話,」make people assured「加上之後主語是另一個they在這樣的上下文中有讓」別人「放心的意思。可寫作"In order to be assured, customers tend to..."
high price 是兩個詞?但是這個地方也不能用high price,不能和spend一起用。可以是to spend a good sum of money/ to buy goods of high price
"in my opinion..."句:首先復數一般不需要和the連用,而且這里也無需特指,所以可以是"A fake commodity is..."或是"Fake commodities are..."
這句話的後半段意思是否是」假貨是不良廠商為了牟利(的手段)「?一個是manufactures應作manufacturers。句子也有一些語法問題,如果我理解的句意沒錯的話……保留一下你原文的詞句,這句話的翻譯可作"In my opinion, unscrupulous manufacturers proce fake procts in order to generate maximum profits"。 這里 to reap benefits 不妥,這主要是褒義,或者隱喻的用法。
I think this must be? might be?可能是原文筆誤
*中文中雖說」和什麼有關「,英文中常直接寫作」有什麼引起/引發了什麼「,但似乎並不怎麼重要= =
*既然這里說了"Internationally",不如上一節的開頭也說"domestically",也顯得結構比較完整
"The reason"一句應作"The reason is thatChina has too many fake commodities"原文中缺少從劇中的動詞,也一般不那麼說
"In order to"一句,是否是指」為了中國的形象和人們的安全「?In order to是連詞片語,後面必須跟著動詞(所以in order to ensure是對的)。可作"In order to rebrand China's image/re-image China and to ensure..."。事實上,表達」為了某樣東西「的時候可直接使用介詞for,因此也可作"for the image of china and the safety of..."
"the safety of people",此處應該去掉原句中的介詞,或者保留介詞變成"...of the people in China"——因為介詞表示限定,必須有特指。事實上,不如改成"...of Chinese citizens",避免詞語重復……(不知道你是什麼標準的作文要求哈
"can not"應作"should not",前者是「不可能(被虛假廣告騙)」的意思
*secondly前面得分號那裡其實可以斷句?
"the supervision ability"應作"supervisory abilities",或直接作"improve their supervision"
"circumstance be solved"處,circumstance所指的「情況」不是中文裡有問題的「情況」,只是一種描述的「情況」。所以這里還是應該用"problem be solved"
最後的"persecution"我不太確定你的想法……persecution」一般指政治上的迫害。如果表達「不再受假貨的荼毒」這樣的話可作「be free from the threats of fake commodities」(不再受假貨的威脅)
註:標注星號的只是用詞問題,其餘的是語法問題。
嗯其實寫完了之後想也許你只想讓我幫你改完把成品給你就好了……但總之我還是把大概的理由羅列了一下,希望能對你有幫助
因為只要求改語法所以就只改了一些語法(可能沒改全(應該不會改錯(喂
希望你能加油哦!不知道你這篇文章是哪種考試用的文章,除了語法以外英語寫作還有其他技巧上的也可以多注意一下
其實英語語法不算語言裡面很難得,想想我們中文多微妙啊他們可死板了……我覺得多看看記記下一篇就不會有問題啦(何況網路翻譯君自己的語法也……
另:順手輸入了fake commodity搜索,發現了 My view on fake commodities的例文,也許對你有幫助。
http://www.360abc.com/article/2135.html
『貳』 如何學習英語語法 英語作文
中國人學英語沒有語法是根本行不通的,除非你有相當好的英語語言環境或你生活在國外,那就沒什麼好說的了。不然,你就非得有語法概念。語法是對語言結構進行分析的方法。學任何一種語言,中文和外語都一樣,首先你得知道它是怎樣構建起來的,什麼位置是什麼成分,什麼詞該放在什麼位置,這樣你的大腦才什麼有一個清晰的脈絡,否則你的大腦就是一團糨糊,試想你這樣會有學好一門語言的興趣嗎!學好語法的關鍵是把握好語法的框架,特別是大框架。你不可能一下子把語法都學得很好很深,但你首先得知道語法的基本框架,即說語法包括詞法和句法。詞法又包括名詞、動詞、形容詞等各種詞類(在此之前還有各種詞類的基礎即構詞法);
句法包括句子成分分析、句子使用目的分析和句子結構分析,其中句子成分分析又包括主語、謂語、賓語、表語、狀語、同位語等,句子使用目的分析又包括陳述句、疑問句、祈使句、感嘆句,句子結構分析又包括簡單句、並列句、復合句。其他的你可以根據你的具體學習層次來深入學習。這樣你就不會搞糊塗了。其實,中文語法的很多地方與英語語法有很多相似或相同,學好中文語法對於我們學好英語語法有很大的幫助,但很多中國學生並沒有發現這一點。很多中國學生以為他們的中文覺得很好,其實他們的中文語法和中文語言運用是一塌糊塗,更有甚者,有的大學生甚至沒聽說過中文語法的概念。這種沒有中文語法概念的問題阻礙其學習英文語法的前進道路。如果學好了中文語法,那會以學習英文語法有很大的幫助的。李陽說過,學英語就是多讀,讀得多,語法自然就掌握了.
1.堅持不懈,從不間斷。每天至少看
10-15
分鍾的英語,早晨和晚上是學英語的最好時間。2.方法要靈活多樣。一種方式學厭了,可以變換其他的方式,以便學而不厭。3.上下相連,從不孤立。記憶英語要結合上下文,不要孤立的記單詞和短語,要把握句中的用法。4.熟記常用語,確保准確無誤。把常用的交際用語背熟,俗能生巧。5.盡量用第一人稱來記習慣用語和句型,以便記憶牢固。6.多方位多角度來學英語。要經常讀報、聽廣播、看外語電影、聽外語講座、讀課本和別人交談等方式來學英語。7.敢於開口說英語,不要怕犯錯誤。人人都會犯錯,這是在所難免的,只要敢說,就一定能學好。8.要創設情景,加強交際訓練。語言的運用離不開場景的強化訓練,只有交際,才能學好
堅持「多說」、「多聽」、「多讀」、「多寫
『叄』 有對於英語寫作有幫助的網站或者軟體嗎
用韋氏在線詞典
『肆』 英語寫作的重要性及如何提升
一、英語寫作的重要性
1.英語寫作能幫助我們提高使用英語的准確性只要寫一個句子,更不用說一段,一篇,就要力求句法,用詞,拼寫,標點等完全正確,而且與前後句緊密連貫。寫和說不同,寫好後可以檢查修改,而一次修改就是一次提高。寫得越多,語言就會越准確。2.練習英語寫作能擴大詞彙量 口語所使用的語言一般是比較簡單和常用的。而在用英語寫作時,所使用的語言則是多種多樣的。從極簡單到較復雜的語言都要使用,所使用的詞彙和句型也比口語中使用的要多得多,這對英語詞彙量的擴大有很大幫助。3.寫作訓練能幫助我們提高邏輯思考及分析問題的能力寫一篇作文,不論長短,都需要妥善地組織材料,得出結論,作到重點突出,條理清楚。這樣,在鍛煉寫作能力的同時,也鍛煉了分析與處理問題的能力。4.英語寫作對閱讀,聽力,口語,翻譯等各方面都有促進作用 自己知道寫作的甘苦,對別人的寫作技巧就會樂於學習。分析問題的能力提高了,聽別人說話就會善於抓住要點。語言質量提高了,口語也會准確一些。
二、怎樣寫好英語作文
1.打好扎實的英語語言基礎 要寫好英語作文,首先必須掌握一定數量的英語單詞。此外,還得掌握好一定的英語語法知識。若有不太清楚的地方,應通過查閱語法書和詞典來逐步解決,不能偷懶,隨便亂寫。2.廣泛進行英語閱讀 專業作家的秘密之一就是:閱讀,閱讀,再閱讀。杜甫說「讀書破萬卷,下筆如有神」。敏感的閱讀,使人產生靈感,使人對生平從未遇到的問題作出符合邏輯的或感情上的響應。閱讀其他人的文章,並不是為了如法炮製,但我們可以把從其他作品中學到的東西融化到自己的文體和技巧中去。當我們發現一段文章比自己能寫出的任何東西好得多的時候,坐下來,對它進行反復研究琢磨。它好在哪裡?就同一題目,這位作者做了哪些我們不能做到的事情?模仿別人技術上的長處,對習作者來說極有益處。但僅靠閱讀是不行的,因為它可以被用作不動筆的借口,還會成為一種麻醉劑。因此要記住:閱讀是為了寫作。3.掌握一定的英語寫作技巧 英語寫作有許多技巧,如怎樣選詞,造句,怎樣展開段落,各種體裁的英語作文應怎樣布局謀篇等。只有對這些基本的寫作技巧加以掌握,才能在英語寫作時得心應手。
『伍』 關於英語寫作(句子的語法)
句子的開頭就是主語吧,主語當然不能用動詞,只能用名詞性質的單詞或者短語,這不單單是寫作里的語法,而是滲透在英語各個方面中的語法。其實個人認為,學好語法最大的優勢就是英語寫作,幫助作文整體的嚴密工整,所以如果要學好語法的話,還是建議買一本好的語法書,每天多看多練,還有就是模仿優秀英語作文中的語句和寫作技巧,會有很大幫助的哦~
『陸』 英語作文的寫作方法及技巧
您好!
一般應做到
內容切題:不能走題、偏題
表達清楚:要讓別人知道你想說什麼,不要用你認為能看懂的漢語式英文句子
意義連貫:中英文化差異造成思維方式和文字表述方式的不同,英文表述更注重事實,所以寫英語作文不要過多的進行心理、環境描寫,120個字的作文結構要縝密,理由和例子要簡潔有力,說明問題,不要東拉西扯。
句法多變:為避免文章平淡、呆板,可使用不同的句式:強調句、倒裝句、否定句等等
語言正確:不要犯低級的語法錯誤
英語作文其實不難,如果你的英語底子不好,不太擅長使用比較復雜的語法,詞彙量也比較有限的話。建議用最簡單的句子表達意思,句式越簡單越好,能表達意思就好,一些生辟的單詞如果不會不需要直譯,可以用些片語。能表達意思就好,如果不會用用多了反而容易出錯,平時作業時可以慢慢積累,可以試著用些當作練習,考試時就不必了,原因就不多說了。我覺得要寫好英語作文還是平時多積累些,加上一些練習,比如平時可以多看些英語美文,如果有時間也可以刻意記些,時間長了語感自然就出來了,考試時有可能不知不覺的就閃出了平時的記憶。
多用連接詞!
遞進型:besides
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alone解釋型:that
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say);in
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words轉折型:however;but;yet;otherwise列舉型:for
example;such
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result並列型:and;or;also;as
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as總結型:in
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祝您成功
『柒』 怎麼提高英語語法和寫作
語法和詞彙:詞彙是需要你多記多背的,而且需要不時的鞏固.單詞\片語熟悉掌握專的基礎上,帶著屬詞到文章中閱讀,既可對詞彙加深印象,有能鍛煉分析句子意思\語法能力. 語法要從簡單句到符合句按循序漸進的步驟領會.
作文:字跡工整,段落清晰,前後呼應,適當用些符合句提高寫作水平,多看些中英文文章以積累素材.
希望對你有幫助,祝英語能力有提高.
『捌』 有關對英語語法認識的英語作文
My View on English Grammar Coures
Languagu itself is one of the great inventions in human history,as great as the discovery of fire,the use of electricity,the invention of computer,etc.
Thanks to language,we can talk,argue and sing ,and then a civilized,wonderful world birthed .However, i would prefer to see a beatiful sentence as a kind of art ,like the flaming sun rising in the morning ;the pure world covered by snow in winter , quiet and peaceful ; a curvaceous girl ,fascinatingly.
Language is made up by sentences , words and some special symbols make up a sentence . But if we put some words and some symbols together randomly ,that will not a sentence .So there must be some rules to organize these words ,that is grammar.
A sentence or a article can not show its fascination without grammar . Grammar plays a role of the pillar in a sentence like the trunk of a tree. So we must realize the importance of learning English grammar lacking which any language is ephemeral and doomed .But many students do not pay enough attention to grammar , because they think grammar is useless and difficult ,they insist that the purpose of learning a foreign language is just to talk and chat and they don't want to be a writer ,so it is not necessary to spend lots of precious time on mastering a boring and nonsense thing .Maybe they are right in some ways .
However , i hold a different opinion .I learn English not only just to talk or chat with people ,but also appreciate it ,i like enjoying beautifull and perfect things . Actually, that is two quite different attitudes : "If you start a job , just do it perfectly !" someone say , " we can't do everything well ,because our energy , our power is limited ,so the most important things must come first !" the others disagree . Both are ok ,it is nonsense to argue who is right or who is wrong .
In a word , if you want to touch the quintesence of English , you must learn grammar well ;if you have the courage to say to yourself / my heart will go on / just to try your best to learn grammer well , it is not a bad thing to you at least .
『玖』 英語寫作在英語學習中的重要性
別急 會把英語寫作能力提高的
談談如何提高英語寫作能力
關鍵詞:英語寫作能力 原則 方法
引言:英語寫作能力是英語聽、說、讀、寫四種基本能力之一,英語寫作能有效地促進語言知識的內化。Swain(1985)提出「可理解輸出」假設,認為包括寫在內的語言產生性運用有助於學習者檢驗目的語句法結構和詞語的使用,促進語言運用的自動化,有效地達到了語言習得的目的。通過寫作,英語知識不斷得到鞏固並內在化,有利於英語技能的全面發展。但是,英語寫作又是廣大英語學習者最感頭痛的問題之一,且容易被教師忽視,筆者以為如何提高英語寫作能力值得我們認真研究。本文就此談談初淺的看法。
一、提高英語寫作能力的原則
(一)漸進性原則。要堅持「句—段—篇」的訓練程序,由易到難,循序漸進。在英語寫作的初始階段,要始終注意培養學生良好的寫作習慣,狠抓基本功訓練。在學生掌握了基本句型並能寫出簡單句子後,再要求學生根據一些體例寫出小段的文章。在段落寫作中要引導學生分析段落的結構、段落的中心句、句與句之間的邏輯關系、寫作手法等,這樣有利於下一步一篇文章的寫作。在文章寫作中要教會學生如何構思文章、如何運用正確的寫作技巧等。
(二)多樣性原則。要堅持訓練形式的多樣化及寫作文體的多樣性。從形式上而言,可以用回答提問的口頭作文,也可以用續寫故事;可以改寫課文,也可以仿寫課文;可以寫提綱訓練謀篇布局,也可以寫拓展段訓練發散思維……。從文體上而言,可以寫說明文、議論文、記敘文,也可以寫書信、便條、通知等實用文體。
(三)結合性原則。要堅持聽說讀訓練和寫訓練相結合。根據語言習得理論,學習者在學習時常先通過聽和讀吸取語言知識,從而了解別人的思想,再通過說和寫來表達自己的思想,讓別人了解自己。大量的聽說訓練能促進讀寫能力的提高。因此,寫與聽說讀緊密結合,進行多元化的能力訓練,可使學生的各項能力互相影響、互相滲透、互相促進。
(四)控制性原則。要堅持寫作前的指導,控制學生的漢語語言思維,發展英語語言思維。語言學習在很大程度上主要是模仿,而非隨心所欲地自由表達。教師要加強寫作前的指導,可給出範文讓學生模仿,以熟悉其語篇結構。同時要控制其漢語語言思維,盡可能讓學生習慣英語語言思維,以便於學生學習和掌握地道、正確的英語。
(五)持久性原則。要堅持長期、正確的寫作訓練。英語寫作能力的提高並非一朝一夕之事,而是一個長期的、艱巨的、漸進的過程。這就要求教師、學生都要有充分的思想准備,要有堅韌不拔的意志和必勝的信心。
二、提高英語寫作能力的方法。
(一)通過積累詞彙量,提高英語寫作能力。猶如土木磚石是建築的材料一樣,詞彙是說話寫作的必需材料,也是制約寫作能力提高的瓶頸。可以想像,如果要寫一個句子,10個單詞有8個單詞拼寫錯誤或拼寫不出,有2
個單詞用法不當,又怎麼能清楚地表達自己的思想呢?因此,在平時的教學中要強調學生記憶單詞,記住單詞的拼讀、用法、意思等。記憶單詞的方法有很多,各人有各人的記憶方法和習慣,可因人而異。教師可通過要求學生朗讀單詞、聽寫單詞、默寫單詞、遣詞造句、詞彙競賽等多種方法促進學生記單詞。記憶單詞是一個長期的反復的過程,要長期地堅持下去,才能不斷積累大量的詞彙,為英語寫作打下堅實的基礎。
(二)通過擴大閱讀量,提高英語寫作能力。古人雲「熟讀唐詩三百首,不會作詩也會吟」,這是漢語的一種學習方法,同樣可借鑒於英語寫作。多閱讀是學生增加接觸英語語言材料、接受信息、活躍思維、增長智力的一種途徑,同時也是培養學生英語思維能力、提高理解力、增強語感、鞏固和擴大詞彙量的一種好方法,有利於促進英語寫作能力的提高。在閱讀訓練中,教師要注意以下問題:一是指導閱讀方法,分析文章結構、中心思想、段落中心句、寫作方法等,幫助學生掌握各類文章的結構及寫作方法。二要精讀與泛讀相結合,通過推敲優秀的文章來學會寫作方法和選詞用詞;通過大量的泛讀來吸取信息量,擴大詞彙量。三要擴大閱讀量。提供閱讀的材料涉及面要廣,才能不斷擴大學生的知識面,使學生適應各種題材的寫作。
(三)通過提高聽說能力,提高英語寫作能力。英語聽說讀寫四種能力是相互影響、相互促進的,提高聽說能力必定會促進寫作能力的提高。要提高聽說能力關鍵在於創設一個良好的英語環境。教師要盡可能地用英語授課,多開展專門的聽說訓練,同時開展豐富多彩的課外英語活動,讓學生沉浸在英語海洋中去領略、去體會、去使用英語,久而久之,學生自然能使用正確的、地道的英語進行交談與寫作。
(四)通過重視寫作過程,提高英語寫作能力。長期以來,英語寫作成果教學法(THE PRODUCT
APPROACH)在我國居於主導地位,教師根據寫作的終成品來判斷寫作的成敗,重視寫作的技術性細節(如格式、拼寫、語法等),忽視寫作過程的指導。根據D.Rumechart和J.McClelland提出的連通論(Connectionism)理論,寫作包括寫前階段、具體寫作、文章修改三個基本過程,這三個過程並非是線性排列,而是循環往復,穿插進行的。教師只有重視加強對寫作三個過程的指導,才能更好地提高英語寫作能力。在寫作前階段,教師重在指導學生如何挖掘題材,訓練發散性思維,以及如何選擇材料、謀篇布局等。在具體寫作中,教師重在指導學生如何緊扣主題、運用正確的寫作方法等。在文章修改中,教師重在指導學生如何修改語法及用詞的錯誤。
(五)通過多寫英語摘要,提高英語寫作能力。英語摘要是把一篇文章的要點摘錄出來,用自己的語言使之獨立成一篇短文,這不是簡單的摘錄,而是忠於原文意思的再創作。寫英語摘要有利於學生了解原文的文化背景、理解原文的中心意思、弄清原文的篇章結構,從而提高學生的邏輯思維能力和謀篇布局能力。
(六)通過發展英語語言思維能力,提高英語寫作能力。英語寫作是運用已掌握的內在化語言知識和表達方法,通過思維進行外在化輸出的創作,因此英語語言思維能力在英語寫作中作用非凡。對於我國學生而言,在英語寫作中易受漢語語言思維的影響,難以直接用英語語言進行思維,不利於英語寫作能力的提高,因此發展其英語語言思維能力尤為重要。教師要注意對學生的英語語言思維進行多方位、多角度的訓練:要採取各種方法訓練學生英語語言思維的廣闊性、深刻性、發散性和創造性;要教會學生用英語思考問題、回答問題;要從訓練形象思維開始,逐步過渡到抽象思維訓練;在課文講解中要盡可能不用漢語翻譯而用英語解釋,消除漢語思維的影響;要努力創設良好的英語環境,在英語交際中發展英語思維能力。
寫好英語段落的三個標准
首先,一個段落必須有一個中心即主題思想,該中心由主題句特別是其中的題旨來表達。整個段落必須緊扣這個主題(stick or hold to the topic),這就是段落的統一性(unity)。其次,一個段落必須有若干推展句,使主題思想得到充分展開,從而給讀者一個完整的感覺,這就是完整性(completeness or adequateness)。再者,一個段落不是雜亂無章的,而是有機的組合,句子的排列順序必須合乎邏輯,從一個句子到另一個句子的過渡必須流暢(smooth),這就是連貫性(coherence)。下面我們就對這三個標准分別加以說明。
1、統一性
一個段落內的各個句子必須從屬於一個中心,任何游離於中心思想之外的句子都是不可取的。請看下例:
Joe and I decided to take the long trip we'd always wanted across the country. We were like young kids buying our camper and stocking it with all the necessities of life. Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie. We started out in early spring from Minneapolis and headed west across the northern part of the country. We both enjoyed those people we met at the trailer park. Joe received a watch at his retirement dinner. To our surprise, we found that we liked the warm southern regions very much, and so we decided to stay here in New Mexico.
本段的主題句是段首句,controlling idea(中心思想)是take the long trip across the country.文中出現兩個irrelevant sentences,一個是Bella bakes the best rhubarb pie,這一段是講的是Joe and I ,中間出現一個Bella是不合適的。還有,Joe received a watch at his retirement dinner這一句更是與主題句不相關。考生在四級統考的作文卷上常常因為造出irrelevant sentences(不相關語句)而丟分,值得引起注意。再看一個例子:
My name is Roseanna, and I like to keep physically fit. I used to weigh two hundred pounds, but I joined the YMCA for an exercise class and diet program. In one year I lost eighty pounds. I feel much better and never want to have that much weight on my five-feet frame again. I bought two new suitcases last week. Everyday I practice jogging three miles, swimming fifteen laps, lifting twenty-pound weights and playing tennis for one hour. My mother was a premature baby.
本段的controlling idea 是like to deep physically fit,但段中有兩個irrelevant sentences,一個是I bought two new suitcases last week,另一個是My mother was a premature baby.
從上面兩個例子可以看出,native speakers同樣會造出來irrelevant sentences.卷面上如果這種句子多了,造成偏題或離題,那問題就更嚴重了。
2、完整性
正象我們前面說得那樣,一個段落的主題思想靠推展句來實現,如果只有主題句而沒有推展句來進一步交待和充實,就不能構成一個完整的段落。同樣,雖然有推展句,但主題思想沒有得到相對圓滿的交待,給讀者一種意猶未盡的感覺。這樣的段落也不能完成其交際功能。例如:
Physical work can be a useful form of therapy for a mind in turmoil. Work concentrates your thoughts on a concrete task. Besides, it is more useful to work —— you proce something rather than more anxiety or depression.
本段的主題句是段首句。本段的兩個推展句均不能回答主題句中提出的問題。什麼是「a mind in turmoil」(心境不平靜)Physical work又如何能改變這種情況?為什麼它能起therapy的作用?讀者得不到明確的答案。由於四級統考的作文部分只要求寫一篇100~120個詞的三段式短文,每一段只有大約40個詞左右,因此,要達到完整就必須盡可能地簡明。例如:
It is not always true that a good picture is worth a thousand words. Often writing is much clearer than a picture. It is sometimes difficult to figure out what a picture means, but a careful writer can almost always explain it.
段首句所表達的主題思想是一種看法,必須有具體事例加以驗證。上述兩個推展句只是在文字上對主題作些解釋,整個段落內容空洞,簡而不明。如果用一兩個具體的例子的話,就可以把主題解釋清楚了。比如下段:
It is not always true that a picture is worth a thousand words. Sometimes, pictures are pretty useless things. If you can't swim and fall in the river and start gulping water, will you be better off to hold up a picture of yourself drowning, or start screaming 「Help」?
3、連貫性(coherence)
連貫性包括意連和形連兩個方面,前者指的是內在的邏輯性,後者指的是使用轉換詞語。當然這兩者常常是不可分割的。只有形連而沒有意連,句子之間就沒有內在的有機的聯系;反之,只有意連而沒有形連,有時行文就不夠流暢。
1)、意連
段落中句子的排列應遵循一定的次序,不能想到什麼就寫什麼。如果在下筆之前沒有構思,邊寫邊想,寫寫停停,那就寫不出一氣呵成的好文章來。下面介紹幾種常見的排列方式。
A.按時間先後排列(chronological arrangement)
We had a number of close calls that day. When we rose, it was obviously late and we had to hurry so as not to miss breakfast; we knew the dining room staff was strict about closing at nine o'clock. Then, when we had been driving in the desert for nearly two hours —— it must have been close to noon —— the heat nearly hid us in; the radiator boiled over and we had to use most of our drinking water to cool it down. By the time we reached the mountain, it was our o'clock and we were exhausted. Here, judgement ran out of us and we started the tough climb to the summit, not realizing that darkness came suddenly in the desert. Sure enough, by six we were struggling and Andrew very nearly went down a steep cliff, dragging Mohammed and me along with him. By nine, when the wind howled across the flat ledge of the summit, we knew as we shivered together for warmth that it had not been our lucky day.
本段從「rose」(起床)寫起,然後是吃早餐(「not to miss breakfast」, 「closing at nine o'clock」),然後是「close to noon」,一直寫到這一天結束(「By nine——」)。
B. 按位置遠近排列(spatial arrangement)。例如:
From a distance, it looked like a skinny tube, but as we got closer, we could see it flesh out before our eyes. It was tubular, all right, but fatter than we could see from far away. Furthermore, we were also astonished to notice that the building was really in two parts: a pagoda sitting on top of a tubular one-story structure. Standing ten feet away, we could marvel at how much of the pagoda was made up of glass windows. Almost everything under the wonderful Chinese roof was made of glass, unlike the tube that it was sitting on, which only had four. Inside, the tube was gloomy, because of the lack of light. Then a steep, narrow staircase took us up inside the pagoda and the light changed dramatically. All those windows let in a flood of sunshine and we could see out for miles across the flat land.
本段的寫法是由遠及近,從遠處(「from a distance」)寫起,然後「get closer」,再到(「ten feet away」),最後是「inside the pagoda」……當然,按位置遠近來寫不等於都是由遠及近。根據需要,也可以由近及遠,由表及裡等等。
C. 按邏輯關系排列(logical arrangement)
a. 按重要性順序排列(arrangement in order of importance)
If you work as a soda jerker, you will, of course, not need much skill in expressing yourself to be effective. If you work on a machine, your ability to express yourself will be of little importance. But as soon as you move one step up from the bottom, your effectiveness depends on your ability to reach others through the spoken or the written word. And the further away your job is from manual work, the larger the organization of which you are an employee, the more important it will be that you know how to convey your thoughts in writing or speaking. In the very large business organization, whether it is the government, the large corporation, or the Army, this ability to express oneself is perhaps the most important of all the skills a man can possess.
這一段談的是表達能力,它的重要性與職業,身份有關,從「not need much skill」或「of little importance」到「more important」,最後是「most important」。
b.由一般到特殊排列(general-to-specific arrangement)
If a reader is lost, it is generally because the writer has not been careful enough to keep him on the path. This carelessness can take any number of forms. Perhaps a sentence is so excessively cluttered that the reader, hacking his way through the verbiage, simply doesn't know what it means. Perhaps a sentence has been so shoddily constructed that the reader could read it in any of several ways. Perhaps the writer has switched tenses, or has switched pronouns in mid-sentence, so the reader loses track of when the action took place or who is talking. Perhaps sentence B is not logical sequel to sentence A —— the writer, in whose head the connection is clear, has not bothered to provide the missing link. Perhaps the writer has used an important word incorrectly by not taking the trouble to look it up. He may think that 「sanguine」 and 「sanguinary」 mean the same thing, but the difference is a bloody big one. The reader can only infer what the writer is trying to imply.
這一段談的是a writer's carelessness,先給出一個general statement作為主題句,然後通過5個 」perhaps」加以例證。
c. 由特殊到一般排列(specific-to-general arrangement)
I do not understand why people confuse my Siamese cat, Prissy, with the one I had several years ago, Henry. The two cats are only alike in breed. Prissy, a quiet, feminine feline, loves me dearly but not possessively. She likes to keep her distance from people, exert her independence and is never so rude as to beg, lick, or sniff unceremoniously. Her usual posture is sitting upright, eyes closed, perfectly still. Prissy is a very proper cat. Henry, on the other hand, loved me dearly but possessively. He was my shadow from morning till night. He expected me to constantly entertain him. Henry never cared who saw him do anything, whether it was decorous or not, and he usually offended my friends in some way. The cat made himself quite comfortable, on the top of the television, across stranger's feet or laps, in beds, drawers, sacks, closets, or nooks. The difference between them is imperceptible to strangers.
本段的主題句是段首句,它僅提出一個問題:為什麼兩只貓會被搞混。然後對兩者進行比較,末句才下結論。
2)、形連
行文的邏輯性常常要靠適當的轉換詞語及其他手段來實現。請讀下面這一段文字並找出文中用以承上啟下的詞語:
Walter's goal in life was to become a successful surgeon. First, though, he had to get through high school, so he concentrated all his efforts on his studies —— in particular, biology, chemistry, and math. Because he worked constantly on these subjects, Walter became proficient in them; however, Walter forgot that he needed to master other subjects besides those he had chosen. As a result, ring his junior year of high school, Walter failed both English and Latin. Consequently, he had to repeat these subjects and he was almost unable to graate on schele. Finally, on June 6, Walter achieved the first step toward realizing his goal.
本文中起承上啟下的詞語有兩種,一種是轉換詞語(transitional words or phrases),另一種是起轉換作用的其他連接手段(linking devices)。前者依次有:first, though, so, in particular, and, because, however, besides, as a result, both…and, consequently, and, finally.後者依次是:he, he, his, his, he, these, them, he, those, his, he, these, his. 本段中共有詞彙105個,所使用的轉換詞語及其他連接用語共26個詞,約占該段總詞彙量的四分之一。由此可見,掌握好transitions不僅對行文的流(smoothness)有益,而且對於學生在半個小時內寫足四級短文所要求的120個詞也是不無好處的。
一個段落里如果沒有transitions也就很難有coherence了。我們看下面一個例子:Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds. Writing uses written symbols. Speech developed about 500 000 years ago. Written language is a recent development. It was invented only about six thousand years ago. Speech is usually informal. The word choice of writing is often relatively formal. Pronunciation and accent often tell where the speaker is from. Pronunciation and accent are ignored in writing. A standard diction and spelling system prevails in the written language of most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and rise and fall of the voice. Writing lacks gesture, loudness and the rise and fall of the voice. Careful speakers and writers are aware of the differences.
本段中除了第6句開頭出現一個起過渡作用的」it」之外,沒有使用其他的過渡詞語。這樣,文中出現許多重復的詞語,全段讀起來也顯得生硬而不自然。如果加上必要的過渡詞語來修飾的話,這一段就成了下面一個流暢連貫的段落:
Speaking and writing are different in many ways. Speech depends on sounds; writing, on the other hand, uses written symbols. Speech was developed about 500 000 years ago, but written language is a recent development, invented only about six thousand years ago. Speech is usually informal, while the word choice of writing, by contrast, is often relatively formal. Although pronunciation and accent often tell where the speaker is from, they are ignored in wiring because a standard diction and spelling system prevails in most countries. Speech relies on gesture, loudness, and the rise and fall of the voice, but writing lacks these features. Careful speakers and writers are aware of the differences.
4、有損連貫性的幾種情況:
考生在寫作中經常出現下面幾種錯誤:
1、不必要的改變時態,比如:
In the movie, Robert Redford was a spy. He goes to his office where he found everybody dead. Other spies wanted to kill him, so he takes refuge with Julie Christie. At her house, he had waited for the heat to die down, but they come after him anyway.
2、不必要的改變單復數,比如:
Everybody looks for satisfaction in his life. They want to be happy. But if he seeks only pleasure in the short run, the person will soon run out of pleasure and life will catch up to him. They need to pursue the deeper pleasure of satisfaction in work and in relationships.
3、不必要的改變人稱,比如:
Now more than ever, parents need to be in touch with their children's activities because modern life has the tendency to cause cleavages in the family. You need to arrange family like it so that family members will do things together and know one another. You need to give up isolated pleasures of your own and realize that parents have a set of obligations to sponsor togetherness and therefore sponsor knowledge.
因此寫作中,一定要注意時態,人稱以及數的變化是否正確,要注意保持一致。